I really like this! It has a nifty industrial tone to it that i really enjoy. I can't hear the bass too well due to my lack of awesome speakers...
I feel like the drop wasn't big enough, and the transition into it was a tad forced. I enjoyed the guitar (?) voice that you threw in every once in a while. The sound at 0:41 was pretty fun as well, and from then on I really don't have any complaints. Good Job =)
There are some improvements here. Especially the bit at 1:40 ish. However you changed one of my favorite things from the original... The synth voice. In the original it gave it this creepy ambient feeling that made me feel oddly relaxed. In this one the synth puts me on edge and kinda makes my ears hurt, but that may be the speakers in my iPad. My suggestions would to be go back and add your original synth voice to see how that makes you feel about it.
This is very beautiful, The ending was gorgeous, emotional and probably my favorite part of the whole piece. The dynamic changes were good and well timed and added a lot. I also very much enjoyed the progression of notes in the left hand, however I think that the constant eighth note rhythm is a tad monotonous. I would suggest perhaps replacing the eighth notes with a triplet underlay during the climactic portions then switching back to eighth notes. That suggestion is simply brought out because of personal taste, however, Your piece is beautiful as it stands. Wonderful job.
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